Reflection on Peer Response and Revision Plan

1. What was most helpful from the peer revision secession was all the helpful comment I was receiving on how I could improve my essay. My peers suggested I should explain more in deep my reason and be more direct with my audience because i was just putting up my reasons and I wasn't explaining why I had those reasons.
2. I feel like everything was very helpful because I got to hear from other what I could improve before my final draft.
3. After all the feed back I am planing on changing my introduction and adding one more reason. I will also have to be specific with what i am trying to say with my evidence. I will also have to add evidence from Lessings speech
4. I will reread the speech of Lessings and add or change what others suggested I should change. I will also look over the homework to make sure that I am accomplishing what i want my essay to look when the final draft is due.

Strongest and Weakest Paragraph

WEAKEST: I feel like my introduction is my weakest paragraph because i didn't identify who Lessing is and i didn't identify what her proposal was so that my reader can understand what i am agreeing with or disagreeing with.

Lessing argues that people tend to think as a group with out being aware of it. This is a bigger problem then you think because people lack of awareness. We have access to many information about humanity and society but people don’t use it so they have no knowledge about certain problem that’s are going on. People tend to want to be part of a group so they see no fear on group-minds. Constantly being part of a group and thinking as one can cause many consequences such as losing control of your individualism, not being true to yourself, and falling into peer pressure and doing things that you don’t believe in. I believe that people should be more aware of situations that can affect their lives. People should try to be more individualize then going along with the flow, its an easy way out to let others decide for you but in the long run many of the decisions can affect people in negative ways.

Strongest:  I believe that is is one of my strongest paragraphs because I feel like my reason is true for many people and they can relate with me. I feel like my evidence was very precise and straight forward for others to understand what my point was.

People tend not to care when they believe an issue cant and doesn’t affect them so they go along with what a group believes because it makes it much easier for them. Personally I use to think the same way, I didn’t care about any topic all I care about was myself I was being very selfish and thought that my opinion didn’t mater much people I’m only one person. As I grew older I started to disagree with a lot of thing that were going on around me because they didn’t seem fair for my love ones and other that I care about. I started to speak out and tell others what I believed I got in plenty of arguments to say what I believed in and to have others hear what I had to say. Then I started to realize that not everybody wanted things to go a certain way they just fear that if they specked out they would get in trouble or something bad would happen to them. People believe that they don’t care about certain things but I know that if they knew what things were doing they wouldn’t like what was going on. But people are lazy and rather have others think for them because they feel like regardless of what they believe they don’t have the power to change things.

Free-write on “Group Think” and “Group Minds”

There come many benefits when you are the benefits of follow the opinions and social "norms" of a majority group, for example you get to experience the feeling of being accepted. Being part of the majority seems like it the only way one can feel accepted. There are negative out comes and positive outcomes from following the majority, when you follow the majority I personally feel like you aren’t being true to yourself. People don’t like being the outcast/outsider and they want to be liked and not against everyone because they are scared of what others will think of them because they aren’t part of the norm. I feel like if you follow the majority then there is so many people being part of the norm that it’s hard to even get heard being part of the norm and since there might not be that much people not being part of it then it will help you be heard by others. Not being part of the norm will make you many enemies because people don’t like it when you go against their views. Being the outside can make you very disliked but if you are against the norm that gives you the attention to get others to hear what you believe. Being part of a large norm will eventually lead to not being noticed by others because you are just like everyone else. If you don’t want to be part of the norm then staying true to yourself will be the best decision you can make because like that you can be who you really are and don’t have to change yourself to try to be like everyone else.