Reflecting on Peer Response Workshop #2: Revision Plan

1. The group that i worked with in class had many different points in their essays, many which made me think of things differently, for example Jose had great examples of his evidence and he had points of views I agreed with but not necessarily wanted to have in my essay. My partners all had their essays all over the place it wasn't the final product but from what they had i noticed that they all started with a strong thesis but their introduction had some improvements to work on, some had their paragraphs based on each of their concepts they were going to state in their essays.
2. One of my group members commented that my thesis was strong but based on the rest of the essay paragraphs my points weren't fully stated in the thesis. Jose commented that i should add more to fully extend my thesis.
3. Two out of three of my group members choice the same weakest paragraph but my third partner choice the same paragraph they did as the strongest, two out of three of my group members stated that i just need to add evidence to my paragraph and that it will be stronger and i agree, because i haven't added any evidence because i still need to review all my points.
4. I kinda did use the PIE thing in my paragraph development but in high school we learned how to do synthesis essays which helped me develop my paragraph.
5. I feel like after i reviewed all the comments my peers gave me, i believe that i make my self clear with all my points and i give clear point on what i will write about in the rest of my essay.
6. I should work on my evidence i will use to prove my points because so far i have none. This will help my reader understand why i am writing about this and my back ups of why i think what i do.
7. I asked my peers if my points were clear, they all answered the same way and they seem to understand my essay well and i just need to make more connections to the bigger picture.

Brainstorming and generating ideas: Essay 2

Part 1:What are the effects of parent involvement in their students education?
FreeWrite:i believe that if parent are more involved in their kids education they will notice the differences and will be against any of the negative things that have been going on with their students education. parents can make changes and can stand up for their kids in board meetings and they will be supporting their kids education. Parents can show their kids that they can be their for them.

What is the significance of teacher student relationship?
FreeWrite: I believe that it is important for student and teachers to build a relationship because when a teacher and the student get along it is easy for one to communicate with each other. If they get along they can talk about things that they can improve in class.

What is the significance of divergent thinking?
FreeWrite: I believe that students who think out of the box can think deeper about certain topics. They can have better knowledge and have an open mind about things.

Thinking about education: Freewrite response to Anyon

2.In what ways do your educational experiences reflect Anyon’s observations?
In my elementary school I reflected the working class, all my classmates including my mother worked pay check to paycheck. I felt like a lot of the things that they investigated I had in common with. For example i felt like the teachers were to controlling and they just handed out work with no discussions. We were taught the basic things, we were also expected to do what teachers say and we had no other way out then to follow the rules with no contradiction.

4. Do you think schools should teach students differently based upon their social-economic background? Why or why not?

I believe that all students should get the same treatment and they should all have an equal education. Its not fair that some students get a better education then others, our ancestors have fought for everyone's rights had it wouldn't be fair to just let things go because of social classes.